Lonely Souls is about this girl, Triss, whose mother goes missing and she spends the entire novel wanting to look for her. The members of her mother’s coven decided that there needed to be a memorial service, even though Triss’s mother wasn’t pronounced dead nor was there a body found. Her mother’s friend and the friend’s son (the later love interest of the novel) come to town for the ceremony and the son, Logan, stays to help Triss find her mom. Logan had been Triss’s childhood friend whom she had willingly lost contact with over the years, but apparently he had been keeping up with her in a weird stalker way. Throughout the beginning of the book, Triss repeatedly asks herself why she ever lost touch with Logan. She has an immediate attraction to him, but doesn’t allow herself to get to close because she wasn’t to focus on finding her mother.
That’s my first issue with this book. She seemed far more distracted by the fact that she was fighting the feelings for Logan than him distracting her from finding her mother. There was a lot of “Oh I want to like him but I can’t because I have to find my mom,” and it got really old, really fast. I feel like instead of having that yes/ no, hot/ cold nonsense, it would have been a lot more productive to just admit to the feelings and go on with her life instead of the incessant back and forth.
My next issue was the fact that the characters whispered, a lot. I mean, there was absolutely no reason to whisper where a lot of it took place. I think she meant for Triss to be soft spoken or something like that, but there was just so much whispering that it drove me nuts and took me out of the moment entirely.
There was several unneeded sentences. Instead of having Triss narrate that she simply did or didn’t want to do something, the author wrote out what the character *should* have done in the situation and then used an entire new sentence to say that the character did/didn’t want to do it. It felt like she was just trying to pad her word count.
This book felt like a poor mash up of Harry Potter, The Mortal Instruments, and a few other popular novels. She says that the character is Wiccan, but then has her using spells out of Harry Potter. Typical Wiccan spells are spoken in plain English (or whatever language is spoken by the caster.) I was really put off by that and it further took me out of the book. Add to that the fact that there is a spell that is used later in the book that is talked about with out any pretense. Triss sees a picture in the spell book and then just starts going off about the spell with Logan. There is no mention of what the spell is or *really* what it does, they just start talking about the ramifications.
The book was very immature in writing style and in most scenarios. I just honestly couldn’t look past it. Plus The Witch Avenue Coven, like, really? I’m sorry but there could have been a bit more thought put in to that.
All in all, I am glad to see another self published author trying to make it in the market, but I think if she had had a few beta readers and a good editor, this book really could have been something. I definitely won’t read anymore with this series, but I do wish her luck.